Our discussion today in class about the Poem-Picture Papers was kind of bumpy in period three but a bit stronger in period four. Jasmine Leininger shared a pretty well written paragraph for us. She offered several quotes from her poem and discussed their relevance to the mood. That's good; however, she still needs to work on the flow of the ideas and could add more voice to the paragraph as well. First things first, however.
Below is the third paragraph of my paper. I discuss the picture and its connection to the mood of the poem. Obviously, I can't cite anything or offer quotes from the picture, but I can (and must) offer specific details about it. Notice how I also connect it to the poem on four different occassions.
Tony Shi's painting somehow seems to capture that exact same energy. Just as the sound of the drums grab us at the start of Sandburg's poem, the colors do the same in Shi's painting. Meant to depict the lights of Times Square, the bright blues, radiant reds and seemingly flashing yellows have our eyes darting all over the image. Although it is a still shot of a moment in time, the ripple of colors seem to be pulsating and moving. The lights are calling to the viewer saying, "Come party here!" There are no car chases in this scene like in Sandburg's piece; however, Shi's decision to paint slick roads with moving cars keeps the energy level high. He even paints one car as a blur due to its fast pace. Finally, he paints the buildings leaning at odd angles, perhaps ready to collapse. They use their stength, their energy, to remain upright. On last look the allure of the lights and the untamed energy can not be denied. Like Sandburg with words, Shi has has used paint to create an energetic mood.
Five times. That's how many times I used a form of the word "energy" in that last paragraph. That doesn't include all my subtle references to it. I need to do that because I am arguing that the piece has an energetic mood. Do the same in your writing.
Put the last three blogs together and you have the first half of the paper. We need to talk about the theme as well, but those paragraphs will be written in a simialr fashion to the mood paragraphs. My next focus will probably be the conclusion. That's a quick thing to write once you get the hang of it.
Acuity testing (for a grade) tomorrow. Be ready to do your best.
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