Standard 09-05-2013

Here is the checklist for the Bradbury paragraphs you need to be correcting and perfecting tonight.

CHECKLIST FOR “THE PEDESTRIAN” PARAGRAPHS

1) Uses Ray Bradbury's full name

2) Mentions the title in quotation marks in the first sentence

3) Opens the paragraph with a claim about technologies negative impact on society

4) Transitions to the first item of support

5) Uses a cited quote for support

6) Offers an explanation on how the quote supports the claim

7) Transitions to the next idea

8) Repeat 5 and 6

9) Transitions to the third idea

10) Repeat 5 and 6

11) Offers a closing sentence

This is the general format you should follow for your paragraph; however, you have some options.  While you do need the transitions and the quotes and the explanations, how you present them is up to you.  How much depth will you offer?  How much detail?  How creatively will you transition or explain your ideas?  There's a lot of room for individuality in this writing.   

Tonight you should revise your paper to include the changes we discussed during class today.  Come with as polished a paper as you can.  Tomorrow we have the lab reserved for typing.  We will probably go and type up a draft of the paper.  Will it be the final one?  We'll see.  

We covered three ways to combine sentences today.  I am seriously considering giving you two sentences tomorrow to combine using the techniques we discussed today.  Here's a refresher:

      1) David is going to Michigan to cheer on the maize and blue.  

      2)The Wolverines will be black and blue after being battered by the blue and gold.

Combine the sentences using a comma and a coordinating conjunction.

Combine the sentences using a semi-colon.

Combine the sentences using a semi-colon and a conjunctive adverb.  

Be ready.

See you soon.