Great conversation about leads today. I think you all left with a great understanding on what you need to do to start out your papers with a bang. Thanks for sharing, everyone. By the way, here is a sample intro I put together for you.
Lights flashing. Music thumping. People dancing. There's always a lot of energy at a rock concert. It's a fun, chaotic place to be and a difficult place to leave without feeling energized. Surprisingly, that same energy can also be found in Carl Sandburg poetry and Tony Shi paintings. These two artists create works that get the blood pumping. As a matter of fact, the poem "Jazz Fantasia" by Carl Sandburg and the painting "Ultimate Times Square" by Tony Shi share the same energetic mood and a theme that reveals there is magic in the chaos.
You see the way I open with broad lead. I'm talking about a rock concert, not a poem or a painting. In five quick sentences, I've hooked your interest.
Lights flashing. Music thumping. People dancing. There's always a lot of energy at a rock concert. It's a fun, chaotic place to be and a difficult place to leave without feeling energized.
I then need to transition from that broad lead to the claim. I use the transitional word "surprisingly", bring in both Sandburg and Shi, and get closer to my claim.
Surprisingly, that same energy can also be found in Carl Sandburg poetry and Tony Shi paintings. These two artists create works that get the blood pumping.
Finally, I offer my claim.
As a matter of fact, the poem "Jazz Fantasia" by Carl Sandburg and the painting "Ultimate Times Square" by Tony Shi share the same energetic mood and a theme that reveals there is magic in the chaos.
Yes, it's just that simple.
Intros are taken care of, but now it's time to move on to the body paragraphs. Be sure you have topic sentences for each one. And any paragraph beyond the second one should have a transitional topic sentence. Click here for a list of transitional words you might use.
Be sure you are doing the following in your paragraphs.
Are you using quotes from your poem?
Are you citing your sources correctly? Remember "...your eyes" (O'Malley 5-6).
Are you describing your picture well?
Are you comparing how the poem and picture share the same mood?
Are you comparing how the poem and picture share the same theme?
On Thursday, your next typed rough draft should be brought to class. That's the next day we will be doing some editing. Be ready to really work on improving that paper.
Tomorrow we will have our final book group discussions. Your books should be read and you will receive your final check plus/check/check minus. Hopefully all goes well for you there.
We'll also spend a few minutes watching a video on the Book Fair, attending the Book Fair, and sharpening our Acuity knowledge.
See you tomorrow.
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